Smoking in a public places like offices،streets and etc ،is not a humans behaivior because a person who smoking، moreover that damage his body and his health ،he damages other peoples unwarily and be in the societies that peoples smoking a lot is dangerous and peoples might stricken into cancer. as I mentioned smoking in all public places must be prohibit and governments must pursue it firmly and seriously because it useful for us to have a safe body and safe society.
| این نظر توسط ali momeni در تاریخ 1348/10/11 و 21:06 دقیقه ارسال شده است | |||
| 1-after etc in line 1; you must use dot instead of comma,
2-behaviour in line 2; is correct dictation 3-after must be in line 5 & 6 you must use past participle 4-last line you must use "is" after it. |
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| این نظر توسط ashkan bagheri در تاریخ 1348/10/11 و 0:08 دقیقه ارسال شده است | |||
| you have understood the main idea really well therefore you have made clear explanations of your personal ideas but you did not support it good, maybe its the reason that your composition is not long enough.
1- change humans to human and it would be adj. and so nice 2-damages 2- himself instead of his 2- a person who smokes 3- people is plural by itself and does not need "s" 3- i didnt get the whole sentence in this line 6- prohibited 7- its |
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VERY IMPORTANT ANNOUNCEMENT!!!